I walked upstairs. Third floor. As cold and frightened I was that night, it got worse by the minute! Topping that off, I was alone.
"Bye honey we'll be back on Friday!" My mom yells as she drove off with my dad and two sisters. They went on a little family vacation, as for me I had some studying to do, being in grade 12 and all. As pumped as I was having the whole house to myself, I wasn't really the type to throw parties and such, I never was. My house was pretty chilly that Tuesday evening and I couldn't bare it. My room was on the second floor with my sister's and my parent's bedroom was on the third. I never really went up there unless there was laundry or mom wanted me to clean their room, since I was alone I thought to myself why not spend it up there, their bedroom was a master delight. All of a sudden I walked up the stairs and tripped, BOOM! I drop all my books and the power goes off! scared as hell I turn on my phone and my flashlight app, I grabbed my books and went off to the room. I lit a candle and worked away, distracted by the choice of wallpaper my parents had picked. Background vines and white doves sure is much more calm to be in rather than my multi-coloured room! My house got really cold and I couldn't even turn the heat on because I had no power, I wonder how long it was going to be like this, I just went along with it even though I had shivers going to the bathroom or freezing up in one position because I had thoughts of a presence watching me. I studied for a good three hours and finally could to whatever I wanted although with the power out and shitty weather, there wasn't much to do. I was tired anyways and decided to call it a night, hoping tomorrow the power will come back on. I rested my head onto the pillow, shut my eyes until I figured that the window was open. I had no recollection of opening any windows, as cold as it was why would I? I tripped hard. I was too scared to get up and close it, I knew I should though. As I was about to, I heard noises of someone walking or breathing very loud and clear, I froze. A million thoughts ran through my head.. Did someone break in? Is my house haunted? What's happening? I don't know. I said to myself, "Stop thinking, use your common sense and do something now. GO!" I unfroze and turned on the flashlight from my phone again I looked out my neighbor was just fixing the streets power line! DAMN IT. I TRIPPED HARD. Silly me, my mind can scare me with so many made up imaginary thoughts, my power came back and what a night that was.

I liked how you built up suspense to the story and gave alot of details which made the story more interesting!
ReplyDeleteYour story was very good and had lots of suspense.You had great detail Good Job!
ReplyDeleteI like how you added a lot of details which made the story interesting!
ReplyDeleteGood story, very detailed. You should try dividing the whole story in 3-2 paragraphs.
ReplyDeletegood story , liked the suspense
ReplyDeleteI like how you used stuff you know about, like the flashlight app on your phone. It makes you story more authentic. :)
ReplyDeletenice job showing how are imagination's can get away from us
ReplyDeletethank you everyone :).
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